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i agree with emotion less - this was a string of words that conveyed a meaning, though.... i didn't like the ending. i know you did it to tie it ...

i liked this. it was a collection of rather disconnected or half finished phrases that all came together with that wonderful ending. my only complaint is that the phrases in ...

i loved your rhyming. very Edgar Allen Poe like rhythm and rhyme style. it's very catchy, and i found that i was muttered the poem to myself aloud. at the ...

short and beautiful. His hand in mine we sit it should be "His hand in mine, we sit." this boy "this boy"? it sounds...i don't know, but it came off ...

this is good. it was a bit bland of poetic language, excluding the first paragraph, but i overall liked it. personally, due to the situation, i think the guy got ...

okay, offer more false solutions to the metaphor besides the cupid thing. it seemed too...ehh...like an essay with only two paragraphs or something. i liked the fact you said "no"... ...

if you continue to write a lot, i believe you can perfect some of your flaws. for one - you were very informal in this poem, and it sort of ...

hahah. :lol: wow, i'd shove it up his...oh, yes *****, too. you know, you could've used the word and just rated this - it would be easier to understand, at ...

kill the last two lines...rewrite them. Someone took this on, they were very tough The person almost won that class they yearn both of these lines have such forced rhymes ...

omit a "..." the lines get longer as they go, but the rhythm didn't crash and burn. this has a definite point, it wasn't forced, and sounded very good. great ...

you know i was at a school dance that night? hmmm just date was horrible. =/ i loved your use of cutting out letters: 'nd 'n' that made it flow ...

I miss the eyes that gazed my way The brown hazel hues of your eyes that penetrated into mine Each time you were so close In the moment that you ...

please don't try to rhyme so much. and don't sacrifice the rhythm for that rhyme. thoughtout this, you HAD no rhythm. i mean, the poem had a definite point and ...

that leads to the fairy lands where dreams live and breathe. shorten or divide this line. though all of your lines are long, this is the only one that is ...

i just wanted to say that i say this on the home page and i just HAD to read it..and open reading reflected exactly what's going on in my life ...